Sunday, May 22, 2011

SSS. Bennu

A few lines of dialogue between Renold (human) and Bennu (non human).
Ashes released! on Friday!!

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"Unlike you, I’m extraordinarily unique. Thousands of years have shown me that cannibalistic seagulls, tool using crows, parrots counting for a cracker, there’s not a feathered being as self-centered as the non-feathered—or as violent.”

“Now I’m selfish, stupid, and vicious?”

Bennu’s next inhale proved it correct on all three characteristics. Renold had forcibly relaxed his hands, but his scent steadily showed increasing aggression. He no longer smelled deliciously protective, but dark and dangerous as a cornered panther.

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20 comments:

Sandra Sookoo said...

oooh, very nicely done!

Cate Masters said...

Congrats again on your release! I love your way with words - lyrical descriptions paired with tense situations. Excellent six, as always.

Lisa Fox said...

A very intense conversation! Congrats on your upcoming release!!

Marie Dees said...

Oh, I love dark and dangerous!

Jessica K said...

Wow, congratulations on creating an authentic, visceral experience here.

Chrystalla Thoma said...

What a unique conversation and voice! This sounds great, Arlene!

Gem Sivad said...

Congratulations on the release of Ashes. This is very intriguing and the "cornered panther" makes me want to see what happens next.

Arlene said...

Thank you for all the support! And, here I go, asking for more. If any of you have an extra minute and want to pop down to the prior post, the trailer for Ashes is in a stiff run for the lead. I'd love a vote for #2, if you like the trailer.

Roseanne Dowell said...

Nice tension.

Rebecca Royce said...

Oh my goodness!! The chemistry is fantastic.

Jessica Subject said...

A lot of tension here. Congrats on your release!

J.C. Martin said...

Interesting dialogue. I like how Bennu senses Renold's tension by scent.

Lindsay said...

Interesting dialogue between the two

Sarah Grimm said...

great job!

Jean Davis said...

Interesting exchange. Great tension!

Lynne Murray said...

Congrats on the Ashes release--very cool trailer! And a suspenseful six!

J.A. Beard said...

Congrats on your release. Nice atmosphere in this six.

Pippa Jay said...

Damn that sense of smell! Congrats on the release. :)

Jayel Kaye said...

loved that you made his chemistry change

Liana Brooks said...

Interesting. I'd read more. ;o)