Sunday, March 27, 2011

Yippee. SSS. Again. Here's Opening Lines for Ashes (May 2011)

Raw thirst dominated Lyle’s fantasy. Cracked ribs, battered leg, ankle bruised by the shackle, three broken fingers, deep slashes along inner thighs, and bone jutting through muscle in the left arm—it all lay crushed under the need for water. Images of shimmering droplets danced behind his crusted eyelids.


How long did it take for a male in his prime to die? The metal rod had been staked deep into the desert soil of Las Vegas.  Lyle no longer struggled against the chain, tried to shelter his skin from the searing heat, or screamed for a soul with a shred of human compassion to help him.

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26 comments:

Cate Masters said...

Wow, so vivid, I need a drink now too! Great descriptions Arlene, as always. Congrats on your upcoming release!

Sandra Sookoo said...

Awesome imagery! Congrats on the coming release!

heatherthurmeier said...

Chilling visuals!! Wow. Nice snippet!

Marsha A. Moore said...

Wow! I felt that all over. Wonderful!

D L Jackson said...

This is an amazing story, Arlene. I can't wait for the release. The angst in the opening is so heartbreaking--these six, very powerful.
Thanks for sharing.
When can we pre-order?

Arlene said...

Thanks, for all the lovely comments. I have some awesome peers!
Dawn, there's a preorder on my authors page at MuseitHot. I suspect in a week or so, I'll get the release day. Sent last line edits in yesterday, yippee!

Lisa Fox said...

Wow, that's all kinds of agonizing. Great writing!

Chrystalla Thoma said...

Wow, really. Great opening! Congrats again! :-)

Laurie A. Green said...

Congrats on your upcoming release, Arlene. Been waiting for this one a long time.

Your six paints the scene of a man in torment and without hope, his fading mind focused not on the pain but the basics--thirst, water. As always, your phrasing is awesome.

Ginger Simpson said...

Excuse me, I have to go get a bottle of water and keep it near. Very good hook and reel you have there.

Sarah Grimm said...

Vivid and powerful! I'm hooked.

Claire Robyns said...

intrigued to see how he gets out of tha situation alive - assuming he does :) Great six

Jessica Subject said...

A fabulous opening! I definitely want to read more. :)

J.Rose Allister said...

Wow that is an awesome, very descriptive six!

Marie Dees said...

Ouch! I feel parched and sunburned just reading it. And I want someone to save him!

creativebarbwire said...

AUGH!
Great snippet, thank you! Makes me want to read more...
Barb

Lauri J Owen said...

Yikes! What a terrible, terrible situation! Hope helps comes quickly!

Kathleen Grieve said...

The agony!!! Very moving and powerful Six! WTG!

Lindsay said...

Fantastic description. Guess Las Vegas is off my list of places to go if that's what I can expect

Laura Kaye said...

Agonizing description. Wow. Great.

Eleri Stone said...

You can feel his desperation. Great description.

Barbara Elsborg said...

Well I know Lyle well and his bro, Myles and this is just the start of their troubles......let's hope this book soars as high as it surely deserves to!!

Jayel Kaye said...

Arlene, I loved this. the description and his agony... Well Said.

Pippa Jay said...

Wow, made my mouth go dry!

Lucy Felthouse said...

Powerful six - wow!

bluerose said...

Wow! What a desperate situation for Lyle.