Sunday, February 20, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday and Father's Embrace


I wrote this paranormal novella for my dad. Here's the first six lines:
The moon had yet to rise the night my mother died and my sister’s fate was sealed. Mother took the invader down, ripped through clothing, skin, muscle and slammed her incisors into bone before the man managed to slash his weapon across her throat.

Metallic. Salty. Arousing. My first scents of human and wolf blood had me reeling.

22 comments:

Laura Kaye said...

So visceral and vivid! What an opening!

Taryn Kincaid said...

Vivid, well-written, powerful stuff! Your dad must be proud. And this is one I'd definitely like to see more of!

Sandra Sookoo said...

What a powerful opening statement!

Chrystalla said...

Fantastic imagery and great voice! I love it, Arlene!

Laurie A. Green said...

Fabulous opener, Arlene. Such vivid imaginery and use of scenses. But you know how much I love this story.

Love the pic, too.

Marsha A. Moore said...

Wow! Love the visual...pulls me right in.

graylinfox said...

Powerful start, I'm right there.

theoccupant said...

That WAS powerful! Nice!

JoAnne Kenrick said...

I had chills reading that...so powerful, so...WOW.

Sarah Grimm said...

Powerful. Wonderful opening!

heatherthurmeier said...

Wow. Fantastic opening. It grips the reading from the first sentence.

Eleri Stone said...

Really strong opening.

Lisa Fox said...

Wow, what a great opening! So very powerful!

Jayel Kaye said...

Vivid and very powerful great 6

Lauri J Owen said...

Great six!

Casi said...

Makes me wonder what the sister's fate is. I doubt it's anything good.

Miranda Buchanan said...

Super interesting. I'd read more!

Lex Valentine said...

That's very powerful!

Lynne Murray said...

Strong six--powerful hook!

Fred said...

Jesus, you wrote this for your dad? Is he into pulp or something? This is something my nephew would love.

Fred

Pippa Jay said...

Wow, that's a six with a punch. :)

Barbara Elsborg said...

You are a bad guy, Fred!! This is a lovely, touching story of love!!!! Arlene has a soft spot for this tail - tale LOL