Sunday, February 27, 2011

Rijo Watches Gerra Turn

I twisted in a panicked side step—her lovely tail had disappeared, her bottom was smooth and rounded. My tears splattered onto my paws as I noted her muzzle had flattened into a tiny jaw and her soft nose had lost its color. All that remained of my sister were her yellow-black eyes—wild and full of fear.
She flinched from my rumbling growl, a continuous threat pulling from behind my clenched teeth. Whimpers burst from her pale throat and she collapsed to her knees, submissive and anxious for me to taste her lifeblood.
Raw terror spiraling though me, anger shook my hind legs and I lunged.

29 comments:

Jackie said...

Oh!! Sounds interesting! Great Six!

xx
Angela
http://angelasstone.livejournal.com

Cate Masters said...

Can almost smell the raw emotion. Love that pic too!

graylinfox said...

Great snippet! Love the images you painted.

Taryn Kincaid said...

Wow. Very intense. Raw emotion is right!

Sandra Sookoo said...

ooh, powerful snippet!

Chrystalla Thoma said...

Oooh great emotion!

Laurie A. Green said...

Wow, that's such a tense scene where Rijo's confusion really comes through. The twist in this story is so well done.

You found perfect pics to go with your six, Arlene.

(P.S. Don't enter me in the drawing. I have the wonderful Oestre's Hare. Perfect timing for that story, BTW.)

Eleri Stone said...

Very emotionally intense scene.

Laura Kaye said...

Wow. Intense. Can feel the pain and confusion.

Marsha A. Moore said...

Wonderful description of how he interpreted the changes in her appearance...delightful!

Rebecca Royce said...

Extremely well done. So impressed.

Sarah Grimm said...

Intense six! Well done!

~Sarah

Casi said...

It brought tears to my eyes.
Great six, see you next week.

JoAnne Kenrick said...

Great six, love the raw emotion here.

Jessica Subject said...

Very intense and emotional! Great six!

joder said...

Very intense and sad! I wonder if revenge is going to play a part in what happens next?

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Lisa Fox said...

Whoa, so emotionally intense. That is an incredible six!

Cathy M said...

Great six, and has me wanting to read more.

mercwriter said...

Nice tension!

Cindy L said...

Wow! Just enough to get my attention and leave me wanting more!

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Dee Carney said...

Eep! Run!

Lex Valentine said...

Wow! That's wild!

Lauri J Owen said...

Great six - really piqued my interest!

heatherthurmeier said...

Very intense and exciting. Great snippet.

Seleste said...

Very emotional and exciting six!

Emily Cale said...

So much emotion in this short snippet!

Hailey Edwards said...

Wow. Very intense scene. I'm definitely wondering what led them here.

Pippa Jay said...

Poor both of them! :(

joleenenaylor said...

Very intriguing six!